~..........>> Teray Bin <<..........~

[Deep eyez 0]

Jab say tu door hay mujh say,tab say sochti hoon

Janay ab kesay hoga mera guzara teray bin

Ab tak kisi say dil laga nahe paee hoon main

Koe apna nahe lagta mujhay yahan teray bin

Hajooom main bhee dil udass sa rehtaaa hay

Bus ab tanha rehna chahti hoon main teray bin

Kisi bay sahara ko daykh kar dil nahe dukhta hay ab

Main bhe to yahan bay sahara hoon teray bin...

Phool janay kioon man ko bhatay nahe hain abb

Kay kantoon say yari hay ab meri ,teray bin

Rout badalti hay,badal jaay,faraq parta nahe ab

Dil kay mosam pay jo udassi chaee hay teray bin

Ada'ain kisi ki bhe mutassir karti nahe hain ab

Shaid kisi ko chaah na sakoon ge main teray bin

Din ki roshni bhatee hay duniya ko or main...

Din kat'tee hoon rat kay intizaar main teray bin

Rooth'ay hoo'ay ko hath joor kay mananaa......

Muhabbat ki kisi rasm ka koe maine nahe teray bin

Yun'hee hansti hansti roo dayti hoon ab to main...

Zidagi jeeti hoon par jee nahe pati hoon teray bin

Log duaa daytay hain kay,Khuda umer daraz karay

Ik main hoon kay,jeena he nahe chahti hoon teray bin!

(its my own wording.........hope u like it )

Edited May 17, 2006 by Deep eyez

[iftikhar 0]

wah wah wah very nice

[msalman 0]

Nice/encourging effort Deeps

Zabardast :hi:

Log duaa daytay hain kay,Khuda umer daraz karay

Ik main hoon kay,jeena he nahe chahti hoon teray bin!

[Deep eyez 0]

ThanxXxxxx ifti bro n m salman :flower:

[khizan 0]

Din ki roshni bhatee hay duniya ko or main...

Din kat'tee hoon rat kay intizaar main teray bin

......

plz use sunglasses B)

[Deep eyez 0]

khizaaaaaaaaaaaaan

:P

[khizan 0]

main nay kafi poetry parhi hay(pata nahe kis ki yad main)lakin itni soft poetry wo bhe is age main,main nay zindage main nahe parhe,lagta hay poet likhnay waly ko bare muhabat hay "KISI" say,jo kay itni dooooob kay likhi hay.mujhe to ye poetry bhout pasand aye hay or main koshish karo ga kay main is kay har shair pay tabsara karoo or poetry kay likhnay waly ki tabeyat ko janny ki koshish karo.(ejazat hay deepeyez)

1-pahlay shair main poet nay kaha hay kay WO bhout door hay,jiss say in ka guzara bhout mushkil hay,lakin mera poetry likhnay waly sy sawal hay ky jiss say itni muhabat ho,wo to dil main rehta hay or shahrag say bhe qareeb hota hay to phir doori kyoon?

2-ye shair mujhe pasand aya hay,acha izhar hay......KISI kay leye.

3-is shair main agar " Hajooom main bhee dil udass sa rehtaaa hay" ki bajaye agar "Hajooom main bhee dil udass HE rehtaaa hay"to shair main zeyada wazan a jata.

4-yani poet KISI ko bara powerfull samjhti hay.yani wo a kay sahara zaror day ga.

5-muhabat ki inteha hay bhaee.wasy.......

6-chaloo man leya,mousam badalty rahy,koi faraq nahe parta,lakin in ki yad say to thora bhout faraq parta ho ga na?

7-..........wasy ye zarori to nahe kay jiss ko cahana hay,is ki adaye he dekhi jaye????kia khayal hay?

8-is ko samjhnay kay leye mere oper wali entry parhay.

9-mujhe bhout pasand hay kay KOI mujhe manaye,jab main rooth jaoo to!

10-wasy......mera haal bhe kuch ayesa he hay.

11-lakin tumhari umer daraz kary,ye to mere dowa hay.(kyoonkay abhe app ko is tarha ki or bhe poetry likhni hay)

umeed hay kay shair ko bura nahe laga ho ga.

faqat

"khizan"

[Aaman_Eman 0]

woOooow Deepeyes

sab sach hai but....

Kisi bay sahara ko daykh kar dil nahe dukhta hay ab

Main bhe to yahan bay sahara hoon teray bin...

yeh true nahi ..poet duniya ke sab sai sensitive makhloq hai shayad... aap nai likhnay ko tou likh diya...but i am sure k real main aap sab ka dukh feel kerti hon ge..hain na ??

[Deep eyez 0]

main nay kafi poetry parhi hay(pata nahe kis ki yad main)lakin itni soft poetry wo bhe is age main,main nay zindage main nahe parhe,lagta hay poet likhnay waly ko bare muhabat hay "KISI" say,jo kay itni dooooob kay likhi hay.mujhe to ye poetry bhout pasand aye hay or main koshish karo ga kay main is kay har shair pay tabsara karoo or poetry kay likhnay waly ki tabeyat ko janny ki koshish karo.(ejazat hay deepeyez)

1-pahlay shair main poet nay kaha hay kay WO bhout door hay,jiss say in ka guzara bhout mushkil hay,lakin mera poetry likhnay waly sy sawal hay ky jiss say itni muhabat ho,wo to dil main rehta hay or shahrag say bhe qareeb hota hay to phir doori kyoon?

2-ye shair mujhe pasand aya hay,acha izhar hay......KISI kay leye.

3-is shair main agar " Hajooom main bhee dil udass sa rehtaaa hay" ki bajaye agar "Hajooom main bhee dil udass HE rehtaaa hay"to shair main zeyada wazan a jata.

4-yani poet KISI ko bara powerfull samjhti hay.yani wo a kay sahara zaror day ga.

5-muhabat ki inteha hay bhaee.wasy.......

6-chaloo man leya,mousam badalty rahy,koi faraq nahe parta,lakin in ki yad say to thora bhout faraq parta ho ga na?

7-..........wasy ye zarori to nahe kay jiss ko cahana hay,is ki adaye he dekhi jaye????kia khayal hay?

8-is ko samjhnay kay leye mere oper wali entry parhay.

9-mujhe bhout pasand hay kay KOI mujhe manaye,jab main rooth jaoo to!

10-wasy......mera haal bhe kuch ayesa he hay.

11-lakin tumhari umer daraz kary,ye to mere dowa hay.(kyoonkay abhe app ko is tarha ki or bhe poetry likhni hay)

umeed hay kay shair ko bura nahe laga ho ga.

faqat

"khizan"

Salam :flower:

sab say pehlay to thanxx alot...

meri itni aam see poetry ki itneeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee tareef karnay kay liay.... :)

or us per itnaaaaaa lamba discussion karnay kay laiy...

wasay such kahoon to kuch zeyaada heeeeeeee ho gaya ;)

wasay agar aap humaray forum kay sab memberz ki poetry parhay to hope....aap kafee muft mashwaray day saktay hain... :D :P :D

juz kidding....

or jahan tak aap nay poet ki bat ki hay kay lgta hay kay usay kisi say bohat muhabbat hay :D

to aisi to koe bat nahe hay

or khuda na khuwasta meray aisay halat hargiz nahe hain...

yeh to poetry hay,aik art hay....

is main to hum apni creativity show kartay hain....

haan kabhe kabhe poet apnay dil ki kayfeeyat bhe likhta hay....per her dafa nahe...

hope kay aap ko meri bat ka asal mafhoom samajh aagya hoga... :)

n in last....

thanx 4 ur dua....

see you....

Edited May 20, 2006 by Deep eyez

[Deep eyez 0]

woOooow Deepeyes 

sab sach hai but....

Kisi bay sahara ko daykh kar dil nahe dukhta hay ab

Main bhe to yahan bay sahara hoon teray bin...

yeh true nahi ..poet duniya ke sab sai sensitive makhloq hai shayad... aap nai likhnay ko tou likh diya...but i am sure k real main aap sab ka dukh feel kerti hon ge..hain na ??

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Salam :flower:

Thanxxx alottt Aaman Eman

aap ki itni cooool poetry kay samnay to yeh kuch bhe nahe... :P

n yes its not true.....yeh to bus wordz hain... :)

or jahan tak aik bay sahara ko daykh kar dil dhukhnay ki bat hay to.....

shaid hee kuch log aisay ho jin ka dil na dukhta ho....warna sabhe kay dil main bay sahara logo kay liay humdardi pae jati ha...or main bhe unhee main say aik hoon...

[Rainbow 333]

oay hoay.. :P

bari poetry ho rahi hai..ji

very nice one deep

[iftikhar 0]

ohh ider tu poem ka seako sabak likha ja raha ha :D ooo bass jii bass boaht zeada likh lia han app na :D

[Deep eyez 0]

oay hoay.. 

bari poetry ho rahi hai..ji 

very nice one deep

Thankaroo moti :flower:

:P

[Deep eyez 0]

ohh ider tu poem ka seako sabak likha ja raha ha :D ooo bass jii bass boaht zeada likh lia han app na :D

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:P :D :P