Bugs 0 Posted March 13, 2003 this is my first ever try to write a few lines hope u ppl wil appreciate it dil kay lagany ko hum ashqi kehtay hain ishq shuroo hota hai dil tootnay kay bad zukhm dil mein nasoore ban jatay hain sukoon ata hai mehmoob ki muskan kay bad unko kia khaber yeah zekhm kahan hain koi dil cheer kay dekhay tu kerbala hai ah yeah hamray zukhm bhertay nahee hain koi merhum rukh day tu dua day detay hain hum roz jeetay or roz mertay hain hum mehboob ki yad mein khoy rehtay hain hum isi ka nam ishq hai yaro mehboob ki yad teruptay rahay gay hum i dont know mein nay kia likha hai lekin umeed hai koi sensible cheez bun gaye ho.bus ju damagh mein aya likh dia Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Waqas 48 Posted March 13, 2003 Its your great first try :) Keep it up ! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
cute_ooky 0 Posted March 14, 2003 Hey bugs... it's me again. Wow...... kia kaveeta hai. I mean shayiree hai. Zabardast. Waise u know same thing happens wid me. When I write a poem.. I don't know what I write. Joh dimagh mai ata hai... likh detee hoon. And then I ask my friends what my poem is abt. Seriously they tell me what I have written. U see it's a quality that great poets like us posses... lol. Well ur poem is abt a person who fell in love... I got that. Waise u know ur very first line is the best.. dil kay lagany ko hum ashqi kehtay hain ishq shuroo hota hai dil tootnay kay bad Wah wah kia baat kahi hai...... Keep posting ok? See ya around.. bye. Ur old friend...... me*! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mansoor 0 Posted March 20, 2003 pehlee hee try hit :P mansoor Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
serenity 0 Posted March 23, 2003 Very nice try Bugs:D Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted March 24, 2003 a few more lines its the second try her pel jultay hain eik aag mein hum khoon apna bahatay hain unki yad mein hum eik dastan likhai hai khoon say hum nay unko khaber nahi kiss qahr mein hain hum koi unsay poochay dil kion lagaya tha dillagi kay liey kia thay hi hum is nazuq dil kay tukray ho gaye ub tu ishq say bezar hain hum ub tu yahi ah nikalti hai ishq na kerna fareb mein tum Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
serenity 0 Posted March 24, 2003 Hey Bugs In your second try evry thing was going fine until you write this verse "ub tu yahi ah nikalti hai ishq na kerna fareb mein tum. Instead of this you can write this ub tu yahi ah nikalti hai kabhi fareb mein na aain gay hum. You cant just write "tum" in the last verse after writing "hum" in your previous verses. I hope you got my point. :) Keep trying you have potential.I also used to write poetry but left it because there was no one to appretiate me. Take care Allah hafiz. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted March 25, 2003 thanx i needed that i will take care of it next time. ................... too ung to die Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted April 3, 2003 kuch shair hain.dil say niklay hain direct koi khush hota hai or koi dukhi yeah asoolay dunya hai kubhi khushi kubhi ghumi ronay ka dil chata hai koi kandha nahe hai aik sahara chatein hain koi apna nahee hai Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
cute_ooky 0 Posted April 4, 2003 Awwwww Bugs. dear hai na mera kandha... u know u have my shoulder to cry on any time u want. Waise I liked ur second try and afcourse these two ashar! Keep up the good work..... luv ya'll.ooky/cookie! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted April 4, 2003 thanx for comments cookie ,yar shairi meray bus ka rog nahee hai bus waisay hi likh leta hoon ,ala bala . ........bugs....... too ung to die Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
cute_ooky 0 Posted April 8, 2003 Ohh God... ppl plz write easy Urdu because I don't understand ur Allama Iqbal type Urdu..... thas my word for hard Urdu... lol. Anyway Bugs... ur welcome. Any time. Whenever u wanna hear nice comments.. just gimme a signal..... and I'll be there wid a whole full list of insults.. ohh sorry I mean nice words! K? gtg ya'll. Luv..... ooky/cookie! Peace! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mansoor 0 Posted April 8, 2003 wellll about ur cool Poetry i have coomented and now i wud like to say :D i love u man ! :D mansoor Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted April 8, 2003 thanx mansoor i luv ya too man ,ok cookie jub mera Dil keray apki insult kernay ka tu apko signal day dia keroon ga oh sorry mera mutlub tha apki tareef ka.:P Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sania 0 Posted April 16, 2003 u guys r all brilliant... in my point of view anyone who can write poetry is brilliant.. but i can't :( now i feel dumb between u guys.. well someday, maybe, hopefully, probably, i'll be able to write a verse :) umeed pay dunia qa eim hai .. rite guyss:cool: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted April 17, 2003 u r not dumb oki n we r not brilliant,try it n u willl get it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
fati 0 Posted April 21, 2003 un ko kiya khabar ya zekhm kahan hain koi dil cheer kar dekhay to karbala hai really good verse u know. good effort bugs. kafi sensible hai. ishq mezaji maloom hota hay. ishq haqqi per bhi likho. magar dil main karbala jitna dard ho nahi sakta. karbla jaisa dard to kaheen nahi. anyways good metaphor nice poetryyyyyy :) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted May 18, 2003 hey fatee ,nahee ishq nahee kia mein nay lekin iska mutlub janata hoon kerbla berpa hota hi umkay dilonmein ju ishq kertay hin ,i know mujhe pata hai. eik jhuluk dikhla ker ghaib ho jatay hain hum eik mastee mein kho jatay hain jhuluk nahee atee jub tuluk unki pata nahee kahan kho jatay hain hum woh nazr nahee atay jub tuluk eik aziet mein hotay hain hum eik udasi ,chichura pun cha jata hai apni zindagee say bezar ho jatay hain hum Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
fati 0 Posted May 19, 2003 achi baat hay. bohat achi shairi hay bugs ap ki. eik udasi ,chichura pun cha jata hai apni zindagee say bezar ho jatay hain hum ..... :D achi hay Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted May 19, 2003 thanx keh apko shairi achi lugee. i tryt o write only my feelins that is it . Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted May 22, 2003 unkay tasuwer mein khona chahtay hain naqsh yad rukh nahee patay tusawer kia kero gay bilal tum tu unhein yad nahee rukh patay ishq ki bat kertay ho tum dostee tu ker nahee suktay unhein kis terha pao gay eik muskan tu la nahee suktay Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted May 30, 2003 my fav verses of a song by rbd bairian cho mithay biar,bairian cho mithay biar usi bairi tay lugday na ,lugday nay jeri bairi huay sraiyan tu uchi watay usi beri tay wajday nay,wajday nay college wich munday kuryan pichay nushday nay.nushday nay jairi kuri hoye sarian tu sohny munday usi kuri tay merday nay ,merday nay :D Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bugs 0 Posted July 18, 2003 teri yad mein khona chahtay hain tujh mein khud ko samona chahtay hain hum her pul is aag-e-ishq mein jul jul ker jeena chahtay hain this one was ma verse another verse that i luv is n it shows ma feelins abt ma mehboob hum tumhein chahtay hain aisay mernay wala zindagee chahta ho jaisay rooth jao ager tum tu kia ho pil mein aisa lugay jism say jan juda ho Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
sajjal 0 Posted August 26, 2003 nice effort keep it up Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
